my long holiday was the best!
in my weekend like in the 2 weeks in speed time with my grandma because i get to watch TV because i'm so lazy at sunday my family went to jump the trampoline because that was our last day of the weekend i hope you like this cool term 😎😎. what i been watching was youtube and some movies that i don't know
the name's because i don't remember so much but i did watch jimmy Neutron it was not that bad i think.
Kia ora William,
ReplyDeleteI really like how you started it - "My long holiday was the best". It makes the reader want to read further. To make it easier for your reader, remember to reread your story and add capital letters/full stops.
Keep trying your best.
Looking forward to your future blog posts,
Miss Laxa
thanks for the feedback and i will do reread it
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